Early Bird Catches The Stone

[Luhy]

Horns of the angel,
Wings pointed to Hell;
Thievery in our midst,
Silence, foretell

Sun shines bright
Standstill and sparkle
The sparrow sings
Proud and fulfilled

Her treasures were
pillaged, her morning
hopes were dashed
Unrequited efforts

Returning home, she
Brings her babies
Disappointment, in
Place of the worm

That had made her
Morning, shimmer
The sparrow remains
Feasting victoriously

Dancing in the clearing
And chirping his song
His feathers fall
Slowly

A young boy drops
His slingshot, his
Heart in his throat
He didn't think

He would hit
The sparrow was
Spared
Catering to her young



















(not very proud of this one but... posting it anyway :p)

[melboyd~]

it's hard to make out one definite meaning from this one >.>
but the first part is interesting "horns of the angel", there's an irony there..angel with horns instead of a demon ^^

and "her"= a mother bird (a bluebird)
so, in "his song" and "his feathers fall", the pronoun "his" refers to= ?

lol, i can still think a bit even though i haven't slept for today yet.

>.> *sleeps*

[shinikage]

I think there is a bluebird and a sparrow. The thievery in the 3rd line is done by the male bluebird, while the victim is female sparrow.It won't make sense if there is only one bird since there is a happily and proudly chirping bird, a sad bird, a hungry bird, and a feasting one. So I think the male bluebird stole the sparrow's worm and eat it, then get shot and die. It's interesting. I have to read it three times to make this comment. And I think there might be deeper meaning here since bluebird is a simbol of luck, but he does thievery. And hell angel? I think they mean that even purest beings could do evil things, and it will destroy themselves instead of bringing goodness.Btw, I like the three consecutive lines started with 's' and the four consecutive lines started with 'h'. Dunno why, I just like em.

[melboyd~]

thanx shini, for clearing this up ^^. i finally understood the poem, i was too lazy to analyze it line by line earlier XP

maybe the symbol of the bluebird as luck, indicates that, luck wont always be by ur side (the bluebird got shot) and is not always achieved in the purest way (the bluebird committed thievery).

lol, i wonder if luhy did it intentionally with the 's' and 'h' consecutive lines. u;re really detail shini.

[Luhy]

I think there is a bluebird and a sparrow. The thievery in the 3rd line is done by the male bluebird, while the victim is female sparrow.It won't make sense if there is only one bird since there is a happily and proudly chirping bird, a sad bird, a hungry bird, and a feasting one. So I think the male bluebird stole the sparrow's worm and eat it, then get shot and die. It's interesting. I have to read it three times to make this comment. And I think there might be deeper meaning here since bluebird is a simbol of luck, but he does thievery. And hell angel? I think they mean that even purest beings could do evil things, and it will destroy themselves instead of bringing goodness.Btw, I like the three consecutive lines started with 's' and the four consecutive lines started with 'h'. Dunno why, I just like em.

shini was right ;x i made a mistake and said bluebird instead of sparrow in two lines x.x the sparrow stole the worm from the bluebird (the momma of the baby birds) and because he just so happened to be eating the worm and chirping, he drew the little boys attention and got shot with a rock while the bluebird flew back to her nest ;x

the first stanza was meant to linger with you with it's vague symbolism XD

Horns of the angel, = the darkness that comes out even when you're innocent

Wings pointed to Hell; = wings mean flight and uplifting, so pointed to hell would mean letting your greed take over your conscious

Thievery in our midst, = foreshadowing about the stolen worm

Silence, foretell = the sparrow making noise and finally getting killed "accidentally"... and what the sound of silence once he's dead means