Scattered Petals

[Luhy]

I was only eight when it began
Late at night, when I was alone
You preyed on my innocence and my trust
How did I know that it was wrong?

You did things so horrible to me
My soul and body were bared
What you did to that little girl
Left me feeling alone and scared

You said it was to show your love
By taking my body for your use
But now I know that what happened to me
Wasn't love; it was abuse

All the dirty things you did to me
Won't wash away with rain
Nothing on earth will rid my heart
Of this neverending pain

I hope that you hurt as much as I do
Or do you even remember what you did?
Nothing will make up for the pain you caused
When I was just a kid

The physical scars you put on my body
Have since healed with time
But my pain still shows on the outside
Whenever the child inside of me starts to cry

That little eight year old girl
Had to grow up way too soon
And all of the hurt and pain that you have caused
Will always be remembered, like a flower that forever blooms

[melboyd~]

another sad poem. it sounds so real and gahh.. i hate the subject (the father) already. but the last line doesnt really sound like she hated the pain he had caused.. the flowers taht forever bloom, to me, sounds like something that is associated with um, 'happy' or beautiful feel to it XP * i dunno how to describe it really*

but the title said it all >.>

[Luhy]

lol XD well thats what i was going for ^^ really deep emotion/hatred... i was worried by doing so it was a bit too straightforward and not enough symbolism, but at least her virginity(the flower) was depicted semi-vaguely XP (even though we just discussed all of this i felt like posting it for others if they read it lol) X3

[butterandtoast]

Wow. Wow. Wow. What an amazingly deep, emotional poem. Certainly very emotional. The last paragraph just adds to it all, it makes my heart ache for the little girl more.

[shinikage]

Cool poem. Not as emo as your other poems, so it's a bit lighter to read (I don't understand what I'm saying, though ^_^). If I don't make mistake, it's the 1st time you use 'I' to refer to a girl, isn't it?

[Luhy]

thanks ^^ I've been writing too many love poems and now too many dark poems... so I'm trying to find new ways to stick with what I'm good at XP and yup, first time I wrote in a girls point of view... I sent it to my older sister and she said "do you know the girl who wrote that?" XD soon I'll have a "dark love poem" or cheating poem probably ;o