her 'shield'; a wannabe poem? :P

[melboyd~]

this is a wannabe luhy poem~ (copied and pasted from grey xD) since he has written some story-style poems, i was thinking of writing one of my own ^^
; inspired from animes like seirei no moribito, blood+ and also juuni kokki (all with main sword/lance-wielding female characters~) girl power :yell

Her shield

Concealing her hideous scars
She has held captive for years
From the fights she’s been in
Tears contained from leaking

What if I kill them all?
What if I slash their throats?
I won’t mind if I eventually fall
Or even if my black heart rots

The strength of her body heaves
Throbbing on the lifeless bodies
Letting her alter ego to roam
And joins in the raging storm

But there’s one thing she missed
A friend who is loyal and warm
So loyal he would offer his fist
Anytime, hinting at her flawed charm

Slowly her wounds start to cease
Begins to think of others at the very least
Her hatred lost in the midst of his tease
He brings out the rain out of her ‘beast’

Now she has a new drive in life
Protecting poor souls from her kinds
Then, lifting the sword with a sigh
Consulting her heart, sealing her mind

But the most important soul she has vowed
To protect and die for is him
Her friend, her weakness, her shield
And only then will her sword swim
In a pool of blood, her sins.

[Grey1x]

Great poem.

You copy pasted my paragraph :yell.

Really great, n1 Mel!

[Luhy]

very nice poem ^^ the blood and inner dialogue could be interpreted a lot of ways too~ the last 5-line stanza is the best XD that was mostly about Saya + Haji wasn't it? ;o

[melboyd~]

thanx for even reading the poem u both ^^ yeah, i plagiarized u grey.. the title is too tempting.

yeap, the last 5 lines were about saya and the other two female leads too (balsa and yoko)~ and coincidently all of these 3 characters each has a man as their supporter (haji, tanda and rakushun~).

hm, i didnt put much thought when writing the inner dialogue, i was only picturing those characters' characteristics. glad that u can interpret the meaning beyond what i've intended to~

[Luhy]

that's always the sign of a good poem when it can be read many diff. ways XP mmm, I'm tempted to look for those shows now if they're anything like Blood+ x.x lol

[melboyd~]

well the similarities btwn those animes are, all have tough female leads and a bit emo in their personality (that's what makes them strong), also not much comedies in them too. i personally recommend them to those who like blood+ ^^

[Grey1x]

Indeed, many meanings is a good poem, but it's also bad cuz you have to "think" -.-. And Brain = Shut Down when not at school :p.

Even tho I made an effort just for you mel ;E.

[melboyd~]

so it wasn't for my poem? T_T :yell

same here, my brain doesnt really work at home...like rite now >.<
even simple poem is open to lots of interpretation ^^, it depends on who interprets it~

[Grey1x]

Not really, there are poems who just focus on rhymes and tell a story like if written normally. A good poem is that who tells "something" in an abstract way leaving many means to intrepertation.

[melboyd~]

i know what u mean :) and mine above is one example of a straight forward poem.

i personally like this one by William Carlos Williams:

This Is Just to Say

I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox

and which
you were probably
saving
for breakfast

Forgive me
they were delicious
so sweet
and so cold

u can just take the literal meaning, or can just think beyond that XD *i have a weird one in mind*

[Grey1x]

Hahaha what was your intrepertation?

[melboyd~]

okie...my interpretation is...

plums= a girl's virginity
eaten= the act of 'taking' the virginity :P
saving for breakfast= saving that girl v for the right time

by linking all of the keywords above, the speaker said that he had 'eaten' the 'plum' (which i assume is his friend's GF) which his friend has been 'saving for breakfast' for his own perfect timing. simply put it, the speaker had stolen his friend's GF x_x

and i dun think that the speaker is sorry at all...he's been a bit sarcastic :P
p/s: thanx mdm yvonne for your ideas. i really like it xD

[Revan1990]

wow, exellent poem, mel^^
actually I dont like poems very much, but yours are pretty good
(but since I am not very good at interpretation/analysis of poems at school you shouldn't really attach importance to my opinion^^)

[melboyd~]

wow, exellent poem, mel^^
actually I dont like poems very much, but yours are pretty good
(but since I am not very good at interpretation/analysis of poems at school you shouldn't really attach importance to my opinion^^)

lol revan~ all opinions are worth my attention (hmm, what am i saying x_x, it's 3.10am now, so yea lol)

[teacher's mode]
anywhoo, i dun agree with waht u said :stfu about not being good in interpreting poem. any individuals has unique interpretations, be it weird or ridiculous...still, those are interpretations. always i find it interesting to read others' thoughts on some poems ^^
[/teacher mode]

thanx for reading it btw~

[Revan1990]

[teacher's mode]
anywhoo, i dun agree with waht u said about not being good in interpreting poem. any individuals has unique interpretations, be it weird or ridiculous...still, those are interpretations. always i find it interesting to read others' thoughts on some poems ^^
[/teacher mode]


lol that's a great attitude^^
I wish you were my teacher xD

[shinikage]

Hmm, it takes some time for me to interpret it. But so far, I think it's about a girl fighting fiercefully to protect her friends, then someone comes to her life, assisting her (can't think of another meaning other than Saya+Haji T_T, I just brutally watched 16 episodes in a day lol, and so far I'm in episode 27). I like your way to describe that anime.
I like these sentences the most :D


or even if my black heart rots

in a pool of blood, her sins

Maybe because of my dark personality
:p
And btw, somehow I think that that other poem you put for example is not at all a happy poem. The last line kills all the sweetness. I think it means that betrayal, although may feel sweet, is actually so cold. :p

[melboyd~]

@revan: are u sure? ...this is my true nature >.> :yell xD u'll run before the class even started

@shini: yea, that's basically what i'm trying to put into the poem~ ooo, u watch blood+ too? great! 16 eps per day is pretty brutal. well, u got 25 eps to go...so gambatte!
and i reaaaallllly like ur interpretation of 'this is just to say'. hmm, i nvr seen it as related to 'betrayal', only after u pointed it out. that's a good one, and that's what i meant when i said that it's fun to see tru other's lens ^^

p/s: somehow i feel it's fun to extract others' view XD i shd start a class here :fu

[Revan1990]

@revan: are u sure? ...this is my true nature >.> xD u'll run before the class even started

yes I am^^, you can't be worse then my current teacher...the only problem you would have to learn german xD
or you could become my english teacher...but then you would have to teach something about the Southern States of america instead of poems lol