Forsaken Heart

[Luhy]

When you love someone so deep inside
It seems like it's so easy to hide
You've loved him for so very long
You would think he could do no wrong

Every day you would hope and pray
That he would always stay this way
He treated you like you should be treated
You thought your life was finally completed

You thought your love was growing true
And then one day it was all so blue
He started putting you down and it hurt
You thought all you were to him was dirt

He started ignoring you and you wondered why
All you wanted to do was curl up and die
You thought your relationship would never end
But that was all so fake and pretend

One night he was so sweet to you
You thought all those things were maybe untrue
Two days later he was back the same
You thought you were the one to blame

He thought the relationship was getting too serious
And that you had become a little too curious
By this time you knew it wouldn't last
All the nice things he said were in the past

You thought that you would marry him some day
But this time God wanted to get his way
You wanted things back how they were before
But you knew this couldn't happen anymore

It was a Saturday night about ten o'clock
You heard the news and it wasn't a shock
You knew this was going to happen soon
As you laid there and cried in the pale lit moon

[melboyd~]

wow luhy. great poem in such a short time >.> love the story telling and the rhymes (aabb) :fangirl (lol fangirl)


what happened on saturday nite at 10 o'clock btw?? :yell

invasion of smilies >.> :hmph:sweat:flirt:devestated:stfu and the winner for this round is...:zomg ~

[Luhy]

mmm, that's open to interpretation XP maybe he broke up with her... maybe he has another GF... maybe he killed himself o.o lol

yea, i wanted to try a new rhyme scheme ^^ still wanna try a haiku or sonnet soon too... XP lol, i love that "devastated" smily XD

[melboyd~]

try haiku ^^ sonnet is ok too, just dun make it boring like shakespears' :P
i think the bf died, since u mentioned 'God' in the second last stanza~
yep, :devestated is da winner!

[Luhy]

yup, you caught it mel XD I capitalized "God" and "Saturday"... since most funerals are held over until weekends for family to gather XP

[shinikage]

Nice poem, Luhy. I think the story is interesting. And the rhymes make it even better. Vote Luhy for president!! XD
P.S. If you think that my last sentence is weird, then you're totally normal XD

[Luhy]

nah I agree, I should be the President Of Earth :lala

and if anyone votes against me: :stfu2:killu:rawr:um