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melboyd~
03-16-2008, 09:16 AM
i want to share some poems i wrote~ :)

It's Alright
*i wrote this poem for a friend who attempted suicide 2 years ago. just thinking to post it here too* ^^

“It’s alright” she said,
But her eyes were wrapped with tears,
“I’m ok” she said,
I can see her smiling- almost jeers,

“It’s like rainy days, my anthem”,
Her hands reaching for answers,
“The world is bigger than my problems”
Finally she’s getting to her senses,

I told her it’s alright to cry,
A right no one can pry,
What irony it is to cry,
With a smile curved in sly,

Next day I found her lying,
Not with bloody wrists or tied neck,
The tears formed were drying,
Her eyes were ‘alive’ and not faked.



Take a breath
*a recent poem written out of nowhere*

Take a breath and smile
Place a faith from miles
Break a beat and flow
Chances come in slow

Pause a while to see
How you come to be
How the lines are built
Before we all can fit

Now ask yourself in return
For all things won’t churn
Things happen with all causes
With your consent, who else’s?

Chances come to redeem
The failure in life it seems
So take a breath and smile
And place your faith from miles

Grey1x
03-16-2008, 11:08 AM
Great poems, both of them. The 1st one, heck, it defenetly put your friend thinking, cuz it is indeed great.

It sucks that my poems are in portuguese and if I make them english it doesn't rhyme >_>, when I get some creativity I'll write some.

melboyd~
03-16-2008, 11:17 AM
thanx grey~ :hug

i wrote it because i heard that a girl in our uni attempted suicide the night before.. the weird thing is, it was actually a classmate of mine who attempted that suicide and i didnt know abt it, only after i posted the poem in my blog. now, she's fine. continuing her study and all ^^ well, not because of me tho. all of us in the class are supportive.

if only i can read portuguese.. i'd love to read ur poems. or u can even provide translations on the side.

Grey1x
03-16-2008, 11:21 AM
Hmmm nice idea, I'll think 'bout it :).

Btw you could read my story, the past of ur character is interesting ;p.

shinikage
03-16-2008, 11:54 AM
They're great, mel! The 1st one is a sad one, but the end is quite warm. And the second one is fun to read, i think it can be made into a lyric :) ,since it rhymes.

Luhy
03-16-2008, 05:37 PM
mmm, i like the second stanza in both poems the most i think ^^ the first one is kinda emo, but the ending just shows she dealt with her problems, so it's uplifting that way (since she over-came it) the second one is interesting- kinda open to some interpretation... but it has a real nice message~ it could be about religion, friends, or love, or being seperated... but as long as you believe in them or trust them, life goes on and you'll be able to enjoy your life ^^

melboyd~
03-16-2008, 06:07 PM
thanx a lot shini and luhy ~ :glomp
hmm, i might make a song out of that second poem >.> but still a lot of lyrics waiting to be sung in my list :yell

interesting interpretation luhy. and they matched my own intention of writing the second poem ^^ it was abt to not giving up hope and to let chance be the medium to correct the wrongs (hmm, am i making sense? lol). and faith is one thing that helps us survive (at least for me) :flirt (loved this smiley! >.<)

Luhy
03-16-2008, 06:24 PM
:lala oooh, more songs! :fangirl

lol, love the new smilies... which ones do you have in mind to sing? :wtf

that's why i really like it too... whenever I was un-healthy or in any kind of pain in the past... i always said to myself "there will be better days" :p and this poem kinda supports that too :oops:devestated:zomg:sweat:hmph:flirt:err :facepalm :lala

melboyd~
03-16-2008, 06:34 PM
:lala oooh, more songs! :fangirl

lol, love the new smilies... which ones do you have in mind to sing? :wtf

that's why i really like it too... whenever I was un-healthy or in any kind of pain in the past... i always said to myself "there will be better days" :p and this poem kinda supports that too :oops:devestated:zomg:sweat:hmph:flirt:err :facepalm :lala

i do have lots of lyrics....but lack of tunes :cry
and glad that u can relate to the poem, made me feel like a therapist or smtg :nuts lol. and i'm waiting for u, shini and grey to post ur poems too :hm

smilies crazyness >.> :zomg:zomg:devestated:XD:noes and the winner is...:rawr