Your Face

[Luhy]

As we lay there quiet
I was reminded of all the reasons why I lust you
Your smile,
and the way it teased at me seductively
Your laugh,
and the way it tempted me
Your eyes,
and the way they seem to hypnotize me

As we sat there silent
I was reminded of all the reasons why I love you
Your smile,
and the way it brings such life into me
Your laugh,
and the way it makes everything okay
Your eyes,
and the way they seem to read my thoughts

As we stand here now
I am reminded of all the reasons why I hate you
Your smile,
and the way it makes me feel cold
Your laugh,
and the way it seems to mock me
Your eyes,
and the way they can look into mine and not feel a thing

[melboyd~]

cant really comment more >> u're pretty good with words. and the last stanza would always be the most significant one. it's interesting that u started with flowery tone then ended the poem with a harsher tone. the last stanza is my fav, and this poem is already in my top 3~

[Luhy]

ooh really? o.o in your top 3? XD I actually wrote this one in less than 10 minutes X3 glad someone liked it ^^

[melboyd~]

yup, the first one got to be 'with thoughts of you' (and i kind of like the song :P), then 'stretch forth your hand', and this poem is in the third place ^^

other poems are very close behind. so simply put it that i'm a fan >.>:rotflmao

[Revan1990]

yeah it is an amazing poem...
actually i do not really like this kind of art, but yours is pretty good

[Alphonse]

This is pretty great. Liked how first it was nice and then you ended it harshly. Great to read. *reps*

EDIT: Can't rep yah. Have to spread rep around.

[Luhy]

hehe, glad you guys liked it ^^ it's nice to get comments from diff people sometimes XD