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[LUV]

Just comment on the story, what you like, who you don't like and what you want to see.....lol

[Shdo]

would some1 get day two so we can continue?

[LUV]

That is SO damn MUCH! N*E*Ways... this isn't HQ, its COMMENTS....so go do an HQ one... lol


So far, LUV is the COOLEST character and she is going to make all of you eat her DUST! lol

[Shdo]

shadow is the best! he plays everyone like puppets and is super handsome and he RUllz!

[LUV]

Thanks Shapeshifter for posting DAY 2

It looks GREAT!

[HGChristian]

and just to let you all know...youll be blown away by tenshi....well you already have...but anyway...yep

Please let me know what you think of what i have so far...and shape if you wanna wait a lil for our fight scene ...we can let others catch up

[Grey1x]

Luv, you, are, the, SHIT!
You are a WANNABE GREY! This thread was originally created by me! Go die.

As for now, I think that Luv is the worst character and the best is Raiy -_-. Not Grey yet cuz he is all emo lol.

Btw, HG, the narrator (You) is NOT omniscient, I mean, you know as much as your character. As such, you can't say "Luv and Shape", unless your char actually know Shape's name. Ofc there is some exceptions, for instance in my 1st part I didn't knew what an Hollow was so I refered to it always as "monster". I also never called Raiy by his name as I didn't knew, and I called the zanpaktou "sword". The only time I used something my character didn't knew was when I attained the Shinigami powers, and I said "The new born Shinigami, but that is an exception for it just to look cool.

Other than that, GREAT writing :).

[Shdo]

not exactly... the narrator can be omniscient but the character CANT. this is one of the problems we have to when we are compared to a RP, in RP what you say is true but here i think its okay to step over this line here and there when you describe what happen not from the character point of view.

as long as you remember that tenshi dont know every1 by name its okay.

[Grey1x]

Hmph, then I messed up, but I still think we should narrate from our character PoV, since we only write regarding that character.

[Shdo]

its something in the middle. its like a narrator in a book who say that this or another character dont know something, for example saying that grey saw a monster is true, to him it was a monster.

[Grey1x]

AHAHAHAHAHAH Shape ur attempt to play with Luv ended really in a bad way :D.

[Shapeshifter]

hey HG, we are not vice captain level yet. And also, i have a random question, if your first seat of a squad doesn't that make the captain of said squad? Because Ikkaku is 3rd seat and Yachiru is Vice Captain, and Kenshin is Captain, so that would be like 3 , 2 , 1 right?

Edit: Yah, never trust girls Grey, Luv was begging for that scene and she ended up changing her mind! lol

[Shdo]

you are correct there are many officers in a div and being a 3rd officer is very impressive. actually i think that any top 10 in a division is pretty good.

[Shapeshifter]

right, so someone can't be 1st seat unless their the captain right?

[Grey1x]

You guys SUCK. I said Luv and HG that I wouldn't come back till Friday cuz I have 4 tests and 2 works this week for school. But this is soooo addicting :S.

[LUV]

Grey! I am so glad you liked our writing. I hope you enjoyed it as much as I did.

SHAPE! Again, I am so sorry for changing my mind. Who knows... maybe you can find someone else in the story to play with....lol

Oh! I am having way too much FUN!

[Grey1x]

Luv, delete that post, it is better for people to read things they never expected other than spoiling them like that.

I didn't said I enjoyed it, I just feel happy and sad for Shape at the same time :P. Sad because, oh well, you just tossed him away. Happy because he didn't played with you which should be reaaaaly boring











*Ok don't kill me I'm jking*

[LUV]

LOL

You are such a dork, anyways... whats done is done and I think the story will move along faster now.

Well, I'm getting bored, and I still need to get u know what for SHDO, so......we will see what happens....

[HGChristian]

and just to clarify, tenshi knows about all that stuff, cuz he has been a shinigomi for a LONG time lol. and he knows shape and luvs name because that is why he is there. and everyone is writing in second person, so i thought i should too. anyway, does the story fit ok?

and shape, my char is neither 1st seat nor vice captain....but was considered for it....tenshi is just bitter about it!!

[Shdo]

well look at soi fon 2nd seat...what is he doing in the 2nd div? i think that considering his power and er...agility any1 in the 3-10 seat would be better then him.

[HGChristian]

lol but omaedo is her vice cap....which you have to agree is dumb...but i didnt make my char too powerful did i...i mean...renji isnt vice cap....and i dont have my bankai yet...but i do have it planned out hehe

[Shdo]

i got no idea if you are strong, as for bankai...dont count in it to happen. not everyone will reach bankai. bankai is special after all.

[Grey1x]

Well, if one of us achieve Bankai, then everyone will. Only those who chose to be a minor character are less important. EVERYONE should have the same importance in the story.

[Shapeshifter]

lol but omaedo is her vice cap....which you have to agree is dumb...but i didnt make my char too powerful did i...i mean...renji isnt vice cap....and i dont have my bankai yet...but i do have it planned out hehe

wait what? i guess i am confused again, because Renji is a vice captain. what are you on HG?

As for the Bankai thing, i agree that if one person gets it, then we all do cuz that would stink if i couldn't do my Bankai, its so cool! ahaha

[Grey1x]

Btw Shape did you like ur shikai in my story? OH WAIT YOU DIDN'T READ IT. :'(.

[Shdo]

how does importance got anything to do with bankai?zaraki is important and dont have a bankai, rukia is important and dont have a bankai, i doubt we will see yoruichi bringing a bankai out of nowhere. bankai is the begining of stepping into captain level and we said from the start we dont want to reach captain level.

[HGChristian]

its all good dude...just making a comment

[Grey1x]

True, but you said "don't count on it, Bankai is something special not everyone will reach bankai. bankai is special after all."

If one gets bankai and the others want it too, they get it, that's black in white.

[Shapeshifter]

right, but thats just for this arc right? we are going to continue if this is a success and then we will eventually get stronger. And Grey, i am reading your story now. I will let you know what i think of my shikai, lol!

[Shdo]

the idea is to NEVER reach captain level, i mean who heard of 7 shinigamis who reach from third seat to captain level in less then 3 months?

[Shapeshifter]

uhhh Ichigo! well he was only one :P

[Shdo]

ichigo isnt 7 shinigamis.

[LUV]

Who cares, I think that we should all stay within the same level. Its stupid it one of us gets stronger, and the rest of us are left pretty much defenseless. If one of us gets stronger than all of us should. I think that this is becoming a little power trip for some. Everyone wants to be stronger than the other, we should just keep all of us in the same level, that way we would have more interesting fights.

[Shdo]

good point. people think about reaching bankai to make themselfs look cooler or being stronger but forget this isnt the point, the point is making a good story.

[LUV]

I know thats what I'm saying. I've noticed that some guys keep acting like they are so damn powerful and can't be beaten, but in order for the story to progress I think we all have to lose at some point. Even Ichigo has lost some battles, and he is the main character. Again people, get over it, we all need to lose, and bankai can be achieved by all, but it needs to justified too. You can't just out of nowhere have it......

[Shdo]

i guess, i planned that if i reach bankai its in the very end and its the same thing that kill my character. but at the same time i think i can avoid reaching it and still kill my character in a cool way.

[LUV]

Well, you and I already talked about my plans for my character. I want her to grown into her wifey role little by little. And trust me, she will do a great job....

[Shdo]

every1 should have somekind of goal in mind about their characters, a goal isnt to be cool but for example to learn to trust others, to let go of the past, to die gloriously for the sake of others, to be the best villan they can be or simply being there for the others.

anyway this is getting out of hand, if you want to continue to discuss that we got the HQ for that.

[Grey1x]

What I wanted to say is that you seemed to say "some will get bankai, but others won't" in other words. And it shouldn't be like that, if ONE is allowed to have bankai, all the others should be allowed too. The vice-versa also works: If one doesn't achieve bankai, all others shouldn't be allowed to achieve.

[Shdo]

you see the problem, you look at it in a role playing way, you want to be the strongest and if not the strongest then to be in the same level as everyone else. i care only for the story, to make the story better having bankai for everyone is crappy and having no bankai at all is selfish. but i still preffer to not have bankai at all cuz my character can do the same ending even without it.

in other words, to avoid petty arguments 'why he got bankai and i didnt?' its better to cancel this option and thats it.

[Revan1990]

I agree with shdo in this case, it better if we dont have Bankai...
first it's avoids unessesary big and unclear battles and I think the whole thing is just better if we are not to strong...

[HGChristian]

wasnt planning on taking it out till i got the ok

[rvngu]

hehe just read your chapter revan, very nice! interesting relationship you have with your sword!

[Revan1990]

ty^^
I wasn't sure what kind of relationship I should choose...since Ichigo has a Techer-Student relationship with his sword...
But I remeber Matsumoto's and Yumichka's Zanpaktous spirits are pretty similar to them, so I decided to give her some character traits of my chara and make a Frindship-like relationship^^

[Vizard_King]

I just posted my profile.

And I agree with Shdo. It is better if we keep away from Bankai.

As for the Relationship with Zanpaku-to spirit and Shinigami
My character's Zanpaku-to's Soul takes the form of a Mummified Pharaoh.
Sean calls him Ramses.
They treat each other with a High amount of respect. Like the kind a King gives to another King whom he respects

[Grey1x]

Have u read all the story already vizard?

Edit: lOL VIZARD, your character nickname is "Greywolf". That was my nickname for a long time before it morphed into "Grey" :D. And I love ur zanpaktou, lots of thinking on it it seems.

[Vizard_King]

Thanks
Yeah You should see my Ginkiba character. (Ginkiba means Silver Wolf Fang.)
And thanks, I worked hard on my Zanpaku-to. That is like version 5.

[rvngu]

hey vizard welcome to the story! your sword is really cool, you really put a lot of thought to it. nice! rock on!!